Introduction of First draft

1.Attention grabber

Most students of MCH may spend time to use SNS such as facebook. They update their picture , daily life and their feeling. Althought students know that SNS is negative things for their study, they still use SNS.

2. Explains the topic -
SNS already dominate our life. This blogger is also one of SNS. Why SNS become strong in our life?

We everytime feel happy or pleasure when friends pay attention to my updating and most people thought this is reason that they use SNS. Especially, SNS is important connector that can communicate with our friends (maybe new friends or girl, boy friends) these days. However, according to various article, many people feel lonely when they could not get attention. Furthermore many think that SNS is waste of time.

3. My thesis -
 Therefore, I suggest 'SNS Never help people to maintain their relationship'. that is, It is my thesis.