Narration of First draft

First, I will inform the definition of SNS to make readers understand 'SNS‘. Second, I will summarize the reasearch I've done. What is SNS? SNS is abbreviation of 'social network service'. 'Social network service' means 'the community services which share information, make more personal connections.

summing-up which I've researched is that First, people feel self-contentment and great power mentality when they use SNS. Furthermore, They use SNS to maintain their acquaintanceship. However, 77% of university students feel 'SNS is waste of time' although 82% of college students are using SNS (They use SNS one hour for one day). They also feel lonely when there is no attention to their updating contrariwise. For these res earch, I can argue that 'SNS can not help people to maintain their relationship' certainly.