The Confirmation of first draft

I will start by examining how SNS give people a sense of alienation rather than better relationship. According to many articles, people feel lonely when they use SNS. How? people find new friends and they discuss policy and share their daily. It is unbelievable. However, many people feel this phenomenon and many experts suggest that SNS causes sense of deprivation

In Busan university, 황성욱·박재진 professors investigated about 'the psychological problem of facebook'. The result was that people have stress that was made by the light relationship that is maintained only in facebook. Furthermore, they have feeling of loss when they watch embellished daily of friends. Lastly, they also have pressure that they must update their daily falsely.

In real case, Mr Lee (30 years old, live in ulsan) removed all Social network services which he used. He told "When I use SNS, all people who is SNS friends are look like happy except me." , "Friends update their new car pictures, trip pictures and these make me have a sense of inferiority.."

a department of neuropsychiatry doctor mentioned that "SNS make people have complex and compared consciousness"

I will examine SNS is the place of instigation.

This phenomenon may implant the negative prejudice to friends, politician and so on. Therefore, it rather spoil relationship. According to one of article about SNS, Lee moon won who is the editor-in-chief of 'media watch' mentioned that "twitter is getting extreme to instigate rumor, political false truth very autistically and extremly". Furthermore, he said "Although twitter is small social network service, through celebrities, it functions as secondary article production factory and it means twitter functions as issuing system for a political struggle"

The users of twitter are about 60,000 and about 10,000 users are using twitter in quality. So it was surprised that twitter is used as issuing system. It implies that SNS gives negative prejudice to relationship. In my case, sometimes my MCH friends update inflammatory writing to attack his or her other friends.

I will examine SNS ,rather, spoils the real relationship (offline relatinship).

In real case, it is common situation that your facebook friends cut relationship between you and he or her. They say 'because you act so friendly only in online.'

Furthermore, people said that they don't like SNS friends who share their depression, rage and so on although these things are important to people who want to share their emotion with friends.

Like this, rather SNS activity can spoil real relationship. According to result of public survey of 'the America character and social psychology association' , people feel unhappy when they watch friends' good news through SNS.

Furthermore, in haverford college, one experts said the more we update our daily too much, the more our friends think you are rebarbative.

This result implies that we must check our SNS life if we want to maintain good relationship in offline life.